The 'Chinese' Theory: For and Against

[ReneZ]

Does it make more sense?

Yes, this is largely recognisable. The previous version was not Thai at all.
The number are confusing and make it hard to guess. Thai tones are numbered 1-4 (with no number for 'neutral'), where the assignments are swapped w.r.t. Mandarin (1,3 -> 3,1 and 2,4 -> 4,2).
hua5 (=head) would be rising = 4th tone.

Thai has many unseparable polysyllabic word. Some seem to appear here but have simply been split, e.g.
bam rung = bamrung, mong khon = mongkhon . Both words fit very well in this type of text.