Lament from the Sea, New Method! f2r

[bunny]

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Sorry - I caught that just as you were replying. I apologize. But whether Italy is there or not, the sentence is still ungrammatical.

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I don't think it is ungrammatical per sae, grammar is language dependant and hard to be critical of. I think the translation offers up razor sharp poetry in this case. Poetry can say a lot in a around about way taking the scenic route, be elusive, or razor sharp imagery as in proems like Haiku.  The less words and grammar there is the more to the point it has to be. 

I have done a short appraisal of this piece of translation, but on a different computer so will put it on from there later.  To me it is Haiku like, with an open question remaining thrown open to the reader. A welsh translation would have been the cherry on the cake and I would like to see this teaxt in Welsh also.  Whether or not you like or agree with the method used, as measured by traditional academic methods and standards - Rubbish it is not though and I aim to demonstrate why.

Bunny